Olympia's 5 point Paragraph review.

     Over the past few weeks we have been reading the famous, "Olympia 5 Point Paragraphs." Out of all the papers I critiqued, I noticed Coner had the best paper. First it followed the checklist to the letter, his commentary was sophisticated. He also showed some opinions very well embedded in his paper. I'd say he spent a majority of his time doing that project! Good Job Coner! I think people continued to fail to interpret the concept of embedding quotes. I embedded my quotes in a fair manner, while some people did not at all. They always finished the sentence and just inserted the quote. In writing the topic sentence, you should include what your paper will be about. Introducing overall summary is the main point of the topic sentence.
    Well, for myself. I needed to work on my transitions. My paper got a 90. I received 3 A's 2 B's and 1 C, and that was the Transition sentence thing. Another thing was, I should have made my paper more intelligant sounding, and less rambling on. otherwise it would have been great!